Flash: Your Shoes

By Bev Vincent.
Read by Ben Phillips. Music by Randy Garcia.

My chest is heavy, hair brushes against my neck in an unfamiliar way, and my groin… Through the unaccustomed daze, a terrible comprehension floods my mind. I throw back the sheet to reveal a body I?m used to looking at from a different perspective.

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September 1st, 2006 3:34 pm

Wow, this was a really powerful story.

This is the first time I’ve ever felt a need to seek out the source of a podcast and glow, but here I am. Excellent writing and delivery. Great job guys.

d.

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Kyle_Carm
September 1st, 2006 8:03 pm

Ooo I liked that story, and I’d really like to see it expanded a bit

03
FlakeNoir
September 2nd, 2006 8:30 am

Bev, that was a very chilling piece of writing. I was completely hooked! (And what a scary theme … hmm, makes one wonder huh?!)
Great delivery narrator … and the music raised gooseflesh!
Well done to you all.

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Jeff Campbell
September 2nd, 2006 12:33 pm

Wow! This is what flash fiction horror should be about. This really lives up to the King quote, “a short story is like a kiss in the dark with a stranger”!

05
September 3rd, 2006 10:45 am

Chilling! Yikes.

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September 4th, 2006 6:35 pm

A very nice piece, Bev. I really enjoyed listening to that one.

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Simeon
September 4th, 2006 7:18 pm

I liked this piece, until the end. That felt like it needed a touch of foreshadowing to not feel tacked on.

I was enjoying the ideas as they unfolded. The gender perspective thing was interesting, and I liked the way the story was progessing… But, at the end, I just wondered where all that final twist came from. I listened again, but I still missed the set up.

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Colin F
September 5th, 2006 7:46 am

I wasn’t sure if I “got” the ending – despite listening to it three times!

So, was the husband also the rapist – or am I just missing the point somehow?

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rob
September 5th, 2006 11:13 am

i like it. i’m not sure if that style of writing has a name but the imagery is quite good. it’s almost as if it were written as a poem. again the production of this and the other pieces is well done, the music doesn’t take away from the writing, it enhances it.

cheers

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September 5th, 2006 6:02 pm

I’m very impressed! I’ve read a number of shorts with similar subject matter, but this is the first one that actually engaged me and which actually gave me a chill as I listened to it on my way to the doctor’s this morning. Well done!

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September 5th, 2006 8:36 pm

First, very understated punch at the end that took a second to sink in. This story did creep me out all day. Kudos to the author.

Second, while I expect both explicit adult content and violence, perhaps pseudopod could mention when rape or child abuse is a theme of the upcoming story in the same way Escape Pod does the warning tags at the front?

I’d hate to see the stories censored by theme, but those are truly upsetting themes that I (and probably some other folks) don’t want to be emotionally reacting to in the middle of a work day or right before a big night out. Just a thought for your consideration from someone who would have listened at a different time with more information.

Keep the stories coming!

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Spiff
September 5th, 2006 11:24 pm

Great story. More like this, please. :)

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September 6th, 2006 10:07 am

Thank you all for your comments so far, and I hope other listeners will find a moment to pass along their thoughts as well.

The highest praise I can think of consists of words like these: “actually gave me a chill as I listened to it” and “the story did creep me out all day.”

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J Eagle
September 6th, 2006 10:40 pm

Wow… that raised goosebumps. I’d love to see an expanded version, but that may just uncover too much and ruin the creepy feeling…

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Philip Gaitan
September 7th, 2006 4:17 pm

Now THAT was a good piece of writing. I would have like a little more on the “she was right to be afraid” comment though. I’m not sure he was the rapist since he’d mentioned “all I knew about her attack” which lead me to believe he wasn’t the rapist and only knew what he told her.

Anyway… fine job. Fine job.

Phil

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Simeon
September 8th, 2006 1:09 pm

Okay, after reading the other comments, I realize that I am a moron. From now on, I will phrase my confusion into a question, rather than an accusation.

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September 26th, 2006 5:19 pm

decided to be brave and listen to this during a lull at the office. i work the night shift, where it’s usually quite for hours. practically screamed when the phone finally rang!

amazing work, my eyes almost fell out of my sockets with that last line. absolutely stunning.

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Mari Mitchell
March 25th, 2008 7:07 pm

I liked the low key music; it added a wonderful depth of atmosphere.

I too felt the ending was a bit abrupt.

Perhaps this one works well because now I wonder what happened next. Why or how did it happen?

I do wonder what my husband thinks. Sometimes I see him as a disinterested boy, with his collections of comic books in self-observed layers protecting him from the harsh world. Still soft and pink inside. Other times…

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November 2nd, 2008 2:19 am

Hmmm… I am proud of my influential chemist Do you want a joke? :) What weighs 909 kg (2,000 pounds for all of you inefficient, non-metric “people”) and is bare to the bone? A skeleTON!!!

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Amber
January 16th, 2009 2:53 am

…I hate cliff hangers. I love it. I want to know what happens… I guess the author did her job well.

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Flurff
May 30th, 2009 1:41 am

So much impact in so few words… it leaves me kind of breathless. This was a fabulous and creepily fantastic combination of wonderful words (thank you Bev) and great narration (thank you Ben). I am so happy that I recently discovered this podcast.