Flash: Secret Boxes

By Jerome Dent

Read by Ben Phillips

Music by love is nothing.
(featuring Bill Abdale and Lee Bartow)

Samuel found the secret of the death of the universe in a box. The box was small and plain, with a corked opening, like a jack in the box without a handle. Samuel forgot how he’d gotten the box before he even got home, the facts smothered and dismantled in a haze. All he thinks he knows is that there was a tree involved, sun-bleached to a moth-white with gnarled branches, fruit with eggshell skin that burst and bled crimson at the touch, a man who had misplaced his heart, and something very painfully white or made of light. But he could have picked it up at Jericho’s. Much more likely, some knickknack impulse buy that’ll prompt his roommate to ask for Samuel’s half of the rent, again.

 
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01
February 28th, 2008 5:11 pm

I liked this flash story. I can’t say it’s the best out of the bunch on this site, though.

The music definitely added a lot and created an eerie ambience to the scenes. I liked the hanging note at the end… I give this one a 6.8/10

Keep it up.

02
dave
February 29th, 2008 4:15 am

what was the story about though? made no sense.

03
Scatterbrain
March 2nd, 2008 9:35 am

He seems to have left the plot at the begining of the universe.

Didn’t do it for me.

04
March 4th, 2008 10:30 pm

Wow. This gave me goosebumps. Not because it was scary but because it was sort of “out there”. Besides, the visuals really were what gave this little story the “oompf” that I think helped it along. Plus, think about how the body ended up as it did and who did the writing! Good stuff. The music was great and eerie

05
Mari Mitchell
March 7th, 2008 8:57 pm

The underscore of the music was a very nice touch. It really added something to it.

I found this to well-written but the laced something for me.

I am fine with surreal. At its best, it is like poetry and encourages the reader to engage and think.

To me this was a painting it reminded me of The Scream.

But the ending did not have an impact for me that I hungered for. So it does not that stick with you quality and long after you forgotten the title or who wrote, something lingers.

Well I cannot love or like them all.

06
Spork
March 8th, 2008 4:05 pm

The music was the only good thing about this episode. It was so boring, I didn’t even bother to finish it.

07
Dreadfully Boring. Flash is supposed to be action
March 17th, 2008 3:59 pm

Flash is action, not restatement. Just because you say “blood” more than twenty times in a paragraph does not make it horror. Also not an original idea. Its from HellRaiser. The puzzle box open when blood gets on it an kills you by taking off the skin. So say that. Not just. Blood this and blood that. THat was bloody boring. Copycats copy because they have no new ideas. So at least make it short. Good music and good mixing on the music, wasted on a crappy, derivative story.

 The way my wife's grandma describe"s her dental implants is more horrifing.  Oh the blood, the blood.  Tthe blood mixed with saliva, the MediCare double billing, the horror.  It will be weeks before I enjoy again a hard candy."

Jerome Dent owed me 5 minutes, now it is up to 9 because of this review.

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