Pseudopod 74: Tumble

By Trent Jamieson

Read by Cheyenne Wright

“My Daniel’s out there.” Mother Beet crossed her stick-thin legs, lit a cigarillo, then offered me one. I shook my head, staring into the black hollows where her eyes should be. Black hollows that held my measure, nonetheless, and stared back. Tiny brown cockroaches nested in the right orbit. They bubbled and hissed, irritated by the smoke perhaps. “I can feel him, sure’s the memory of spittin’ the bastard, bloody and blind-eyed, out of me womb.”

I sat, and her smoke-bound mutterings washed against me. Folk like that, their words are weighty. You listen and not without fear.

01
Catch 22
January 25th, 2008 1:44 pm

This story was like getting dropped into the middle of a novel. Unfortunately, it wasn’t a horror novel.

02
David
January 25th, 2008 10:03 pm

While I agree with Catch 22, it is like being dropped into a novel, I found the story interesting despite this. Stories like this, The Goon Job, The Knacker’s Yard, etc are interesting, yet I would appreciate some expansion. When you create a world with so much room it is a little depressing to think this is the most you can do with it.

Overall I would say this story isn’t great, it was definitely worth listening to and I hope to hear something else from this author.

03
Sam
January 29th, 2008 1:33 pm

I think this may’ve been the worst one yet.

04
Feste
January 30th, 2008 12:38 am

I was very impressed with the quality of the reading, which helped me to grapple a tenuous hold on the plotline, and the story was fascinating, but I agree that it was not written like a short story, it was written like a mangled cut-and-paste version of an excellent story. Also, I don’t know if this was another obvious part of the story that never got developed, but I was waiting the entire time for some hardcore voodoo, which never happened.

05
January 31st, 2008 1:28 pm

Geez, I guess I’m in the minority. I thought this was a great creepy story and another excellent reading by Cheyenne Wright. Actually, my favorite reading of his here thus far.

As far as what David said about it being “depressing to think this is the most you can do with” such a rich world like this, as in a short story, I couldn’t disagree more. This is a horror zine for short stories and if you can provide a short story that smacks me as hard as a novel in about 30 minutes and keep me thinking about it for a long time (like the Knacker’s Yard), that’s talent. And then there’s the obvious bit that if this is just a short story, I’d love to see what Jamieson does with something longer.

All in all, I thought it was a well-crafted story and a great listen.

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crazygirl23
January 31st, 2008 4:56 pm

I do groove on the wierd stuff, and this story was wierder than most. I was wondering if there was more to this story…a prequel? Perhaps another story set in the same world?

I like the thought of the essence of a city being a tangible, addictive substance, and of adoration and want becoming so wanton and intertwined as to be indistingushable within someone. Horror and desire play so nicely together…

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Spork
January 31st, 2008 7:06 pm

What I liked:
A killer as the main character.
Creepy visuals.
Magical elements and demons.
The main character’s ending in the story isn’t happy or hopeful or some king of warm fuzzy lesson about life.
The reading was excellent.
The audio quality was excellent.

What I didn’t like:
Overwhelming amount of untold backstory and basic background information about the environment.
It’s ‘especially’, not ‘expessially.’
Why would anyone put that much magic into their room and then leave?

08
Julia
February 1st, 2008 3:40 pm

All I can say is, yuck. This story SUCKED. Not good at all.

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StephieJo
February 20th, 2008 5:47 pm

After five or six failed attempts, I finally managed to get through this one. I agree with the first comment: I felt as if I were dropped into the middle of a story. I liked the reading, it made the story sound like good old pulp fiction. Unfortunately, the story itself did nothing for me.

10
March 1st, 2008 11:35 pm

Damn. I think I’m in the wrong decade. I LIKE not being told every damned little detail. I like using my imagination, i like being asked to provide something to the story myself. This story made me excited, it made me want to know more and see more. That’s a damned good story.

Also, the reading was great. Cheyenne’s work added a lot to the experience.
Thanks!

11
Mari Mitchell
March 16th, 2008 11:12 pm

I am shocked to see all the hate for this one.

I liked that you were aloud room to think. If stories cannot do that, what is the point.

12
Spork
March 17th, 2008 4:45 pm

Aloud is not the same thing as allowed.

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Mari Mitchell
April 28th, 2008 8:27 pm

Thank you oh gerat Spork.

14
May 11th, 2008 8:56 pm

I loved this story, I enjoyed not having everything elaborated on, giving me room to fill in the details of the world. It seemed more natural to me. This story has me wanting to run a Ravenloft game again.

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Sam
May 31st, 2008 11:48 pm

Man, I dig this one.

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July 22nd, 2009 4:18 pm

Reminded me of some of my favorite authors. I love seeing the world in action without unnecessary explanations.